From Robert Lee Brewer:
New day, new city. We’ve made it to Austin–just in time to write a new poem.
For today’s prompt, write a poem about a sound. The poem could be about a small sound, a loud sound, a happy sound, or a creepy sound. And yes, music sounds count as well.
Note from Victoria: This prompt immediately brought too many songs to my mind. "... the sound of the men working on the chain gang." "the sound of silence." "stop children what's that sound?" Sometimes it's hard to sort out memory in order to create something new.
the night was dark
ReplyDeleteit was pouring rain
a good night to read
a chiller
so I thought
the sound
came from the back
of my long mobile home
it was a moan and a groan
but I was her all alone
it stopped
so I blew it off to the wind
and it was hard to distinguish
through the pouring rain
on the metal roof
until
it came again
only louder and more persistent
I got the chills
put down my chiller
and grabbed a handy
quilt to hide beneath
it came again
a moan and a groan
only louder
with pounding heart
and bile in my throat
I decided I'd better
check it out
slowly I walked
to the back
with a hatchet
in my hand
flicking on lights
as I walked
I came at last
to the back
and saw a
squirming lump beneath
the covers of my
neatly made up bed
I threw them back
to find...
two cats fornicating
moaning and groaning
finally yowling and screeching
I only had one cat
so I never suspected
what was going on...
lmbo!!! that is hilarious and well done! had me on the edge of my seat for the majority of the poem then cracking up with the final verse.
DeleteLOL!! This is great. I think the actually poetry starts out a lot better than it ends, but it's a great story!!!
DeleteFunny stuff. I like it. I think you could make it even sparer.
DeleteToo funny!!! Thanks for a good story!
DeleteNot sure if this works but,,,
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His clarinet wails in the evening shadows
fills the air with different shades of blue
the colors come alive with each sorrowful note.
The tones float in the air. Wail mournfully
cry as if it's own heart has been broken.'
The timbre softens - caresses your soul with love.
You close your eyes - absorb the whispered notes
the clarinet player leaves his emotions to sail,
with the final notes, into the distant night.
This not only works, it is awesome. I love "absorb the whispered notes"
DeleteOh! Stanza 2, line 2, should be "its" not "it's"
Deleteand i can't edit it so imagine it fixed :-)
DeleteThis is totally beautiful!!! I love the "colors come alive with each sorrowful note" and "fills the air with different shades of blue"... I love love love it!!!
ReplyDeleteI may try this again tomorrow. I do not like my effort but I am out of time. Time to go to karate for the evening and I rarely have energy to spare when I get home.
ReplyDeleteIt started with a shout
of pain, of disbelief,
loud, long, clear, but finite.
Marches, signs, arrests.
Expressing opinion,
charging the batteries.
But it is the whispers
of the long run that win.
Passionate young people
run for political
office. They see futures.
They will change the country.
I don't know what you don't like about this very expressive poem. There is a lot of good imagery in it and even though I can see and hear the first verse it's the second one that really gets to me. "it is the whispers of the long run that win." I could feel that line in my heart.
DeleteI agree with Linda. This is a very expressive poem filled with great images and feelings.
DeleteA good expression of a truth in poetry.
DeleteIt may be a few days before I can write anything or make intelligent comments. My heart is still with you.
ReplyDeleteI believe I can speak for everyone, we miss you and your fine poetry.
DeleteYes, me too!
DeleteMy ears have been upgraded,
ReplyDeletenow all my clocks resound
the ticking and the tocking
goes round and round and round.
While hearing is a blessing
and mine is now so good
there are some times I wish that I
Could stem the rising flood.
Yet while I could remove them
I find my aids to hearing
have made a lovely difference
that I will keep on wearing.
LOL. I am getting to the point where I probably ought to go for a hearing check. Fun interpretation of the prompt!
DeleteGlad you enjoyed it. Have fun in Austin!
DeleteWhile this is rather silly, it does express a truth, and I thought it was kind of fun to play with the sounds of the rhymes.
ReplyDeleteWoops, forgot the title--it is Sounds
ReplyDeleteThis is cute and full of fun!!! your beat and your rhyme are right on and it was a pleasure to read aloud to Paul. I don't think it was silly at all.
ReplyDeleteMany hanks! I am glad ou enjoyed it. On to Discovery!
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