For today’s prompt, write a poem with at least four of the following eight words:
- flat
- ring
- lavish
- vessel
- paper
- blacklist
- gaudy
- tooth
Of course, ambitious poets will immediately try using all eight words, but four will do if you’re just trying to get through today’s prompt.
As she sits in her lavish yet gaudy room
ReplyDeleteshe wonders how her life came to this
she hides inside the dark and gloom.
her laughter once in full bloom
has fallen flat like her lovers kiss
As she sits in her lavish yet gaudy room.
surrounded only now by heavy doom
she hears deaths funereal hiss
she hides inside the dark and gloom.
Her bed her vessel to deaths womb
it's eerie call she cannot dismiss
as she sits in her lavish yet gaudy room.
She bids farewell to her handsome groom
crosses over the great abyss
she hides inside the dark and gloom.
over her intense sadness does loom
she cries for all she will miss
as she sits in her lavish yet gaudy room
she hides inside the dark and gloom.
Beautiful and dark villanelle. Perfect. I loved it!!
DeleteNice villanelle. You went for the "gaudy" end of the words. I chose the words that "stuck out" the least. LOL.
DeleteBonnie! Very Gothic!
DeleteThe princess Corinne was taken on the flatboat
ReplyDeletethey took her far out to sea
she wore a lavish green gown and ring
the ring they wanted so she could be free
They bound her wrists and covered her eyes
and transferred her to the vessel, the Paper Marie
Now, the other pirates grew angry when they found out
the Paper Marie was black listed it was bound to be
the big bad pirate Dirty Burns has a gaudy golden tooth
He was easy to find and easy to see
his tooth sparkled from a mile away
So, they rescued the Princess Corrine one day
on the vessel the Paper Marie...
I like how you can make your settings so visual to the reader which makes them more fun and interesting to read.
Deletealso the last line reminded me of Annabelle Lee :-)
DeleteAwesome you used all eight words!!! I tried but that was too hard in a haiku. lol. And I agree with Bonnie, it has the same rhythm as Annabelle Lee..
Deleteflatten crushed paper
ReplyDeletedraw rings around certain names
her blacklist lengthens
awesome! it only took you four lines to use as many words from the list as I did in 19! well done!!
DeleteAwesome haiku Victoria!!! And you used enough of the words to make a good showing!!! Good Job!
DeleteIn the Gallery
ReplyDeletethe statue wore a flat gold ring of gaudy teeth
around its marble neck, a lavish emblem
of artistic excess or social extreme
.
each tooth covered in scrimshaw
ceremonial pictures
for a biting afternoon
.
A critic in the paper said
the show should be blacklisted
or delisted or at the least recycled.
.
No one
read the review.
(8-word challenge)
ReplyDeleteThe flat expanse of paper reproaches me:
awaiting words, awaiting thoughts, awaiting truth
but my mind is an empty vessel tonight.
While I might lavish my own praises, with nary a tooth
or bite of wit, my words would ring false,
mere gaudy solipsisms, garish inventions.
Such frivolity could cost me my poetic license,
put me on a blacklist throughout the world or arts
and culture. Nay, there is no poem here, just nonsense.
©Priscilla Anne Tennant Herrington
A vague tunnel caresses my eyes,
ReplyDeleteA ring of light,
Without realizing I am flat on the floor,
My body, as a vessel,
I struggle,
Fighting tooth and nail to hang on,
Yet unconsciousness drags me by the toe,
And I go.