Finally got to commenting on last week's poem. And I promise I will never, ever brag that I "never get sick." I seldom do but when I do, it's full force. I ended up with a cold and a stomach bug at the same time. It started on Christmas Day and I'm just feeling better today.
A young man who tired of cooking Hoped he'd find someone kind and good looking To take over his chores And be one who adores Without needing money or booking.
He offered this person to marry And hoped that she would not be chary But alas he discovered When his needs he uncovered That no one who answered would tarry.
phew! got new year out of the way, so the library is open again finally. got a couple for you on motives.
MOTIVATION
" plastic crap and things going wrong. the future is made in hong kong " - flux of pink indians.
my motive is love it's all i ever wanted my motive for moving was my little dove if i can't buy her enough make up and lagers she does one of her public emotional saga's my motives were true, but i got jaunted
the deed is done...is that not enough? you were in need you gotta soft to be tough her motive is to feed her love lead i either love or hate. from fate and destiny, i do digress ....................but such a pretty dress.
oh, there was nothing pure about her bonita. like that old nursery rhyme " when she was good, she was very, very good. but when she was bad, she was wicked " - paul.
I could get into a long discussion of codependency, the difference between love and cathexis, (what you describe is the latter), but maybe I'll save that for email. As a poem, it's really good and as always, I think it could be even better with a bit of editing but I understand your spontaneity also. Sorry it's taken me so long to respond to your email. I WILL get to it. LOL.
thanks victoria. hadn't felt this way in a long time. like i always say, you would have to have met this woman to understand. despite the zillions of poems i've written about her. how do describe a crazy goddess? - love and peace paul.p.s. e-mail anytime karate kid ha ha.
How indeed! I looked up cathexis and was quite in agreement with you, Victoria. Good description. I've met a few crazy goddesses in my time, however, I am not a big fan. I always say, "Handsome is as handsome dos," And "beauty is in the eye of the beholder." Perhaps she's a witch? They are good at enchanting people.
don't know if she's a witch tash, but she certainly enchanted me. probably that love potion she kept in her back pocket ha ha.it wasn't easy going out with a woman the whole city wanted to sleep with - love and peace - paul.
this is about my perfect woman that i met briefly. my motivation for going on, if you will, it was only a 45 min conversation, for as the title suggests we were only
STRANGERS ON THE TRAIN ( part 3)
lauren doesn't want to work in the insurance office she wants to be a mrs, not a miss what she really wants to do is paint she's clumsy and plain and gets caught in the rain no make up. terrible hair and clothes but she knows which way the river flows no way could she twirl just my type of girl
bottle thick glasses and attends catholic masses but with those eyes, i don't think she has to forgive any trespassers
spotty, chubby and shy that's what caught my eye wants to paint the universe in verse.
happy new year everybody. have a better one - love - paul.
like i said bonita, my type of girl, with a bag of books and music. too young for me though. made a nice change from meeting women with a bag full of booze, needles and heroin though - love - paul.
oh, i was gonna put ms, but it didn't go with office. getting my motivation back after a period of hibernation. expressing who i am, tends to get me in to trouble around here.....but who cares. to quote popeye the sailor man " i am what i am " ha ha - love and peace - paul.
Hi everybody, I just caught up with the prompt that was two for one, cities and war and love. I posted a poem and left comments on all of the poems. Happy New Year
The temperature went below 0 so they moved out of the camper for a couple of weeks to stay warm so I haven't been able to push her but I will blow up her phone on this one this week. At least try. LOL
Do you know what you intend to do about that or will you try a quick fix like rabbit from a hat I can't understand why people act like they do What are their motives do they care for me or you?
Are the actions we perceive really as they appear or are we seeing them twisted within our social sphere what we may intend could come out all wrong might even be compared to a protest song
I'm just trying to point out that it's not cut and dried when you mean to help out but hurt someone's pride as to the interpretation of my analogy of intention I think I'll leave that to Frank Zappa and the "Mpther's of Invention"
For those of you not familiar with Frank, I do not mean a slight My motives are purely whimsical and not put forth to fight There's an old saying, "if life gives you lemons, make lemonade" Try to think the best possible things to show with what you're made.
You must have worked hard on that one. Lots of good rhymes. Interesting piece of writing. (Was this the one you were looking for a rhyme for else for?)I like he questions in the second verse. Something to think about.
good job! love that the rhymes don't feel forced so the flow of the lines isn't disrupted. And Tasha it was paul fowler looking for a word to rhyme with else not paul bole...
He's coming around again that look in his eye I've seen that look before that lovelorn google eyed I can't live without you gaze Can I resist him this time in the end I don't I give him what he wants eight weeks later I realize once again his motives were lust not love as he proclaimed yet when I look at the four little kittens who snuggle against me to nurse I can't judge him contented purrs from me and the babies fill the air.
oh, those pussy cats can be naughty creatures bonita.....not as naughty as somebody i know though ha ha. she's got more kittens than that - love and peace paul.
Finally got to commenting on last week's poem. And I promise I will never, ever brag that I "never get sick." I seldom do but when I do, it's full force. I ended up with a cold and a stomach bug at the same time. It started on Christmas Day and I'm just feeling better today.
ReplyDeleteGlad you are feeling better for sure!
DeleteHis motive was all wrong
ReplyDeletehe bragged about it way too much
you cannot murder a Mexican kid
to get that 300 pounds of pot
he bragged about it way too much
he made people hate him
to get that 300 pounds of pot
it wasn't worth it for his karma
He made people hate him
it was hard to understand
it wasn't worth it for his karma
it wasn't worth it for his soul
It was hard to understand
his motives for the murder
it wasn't worth it for his soul
and they never found a body
His motives for the murder
they were clearly greed and arrogance
and they never found a body
so in his mind, there was no crime
They were clearly greed and arrogance
you cannot murder a Mexican kid
and they never found a body
His motive was all wrong
ooo, brrr. Wicked!Great poem, well said and chilling!
DeleteAbsolutely awesome!!!
Deletesome people have no soul to lose wolfie. they sold it down at the crossroads - love and peace - paul.
Deletehard reality poem and well presented. was this a real story? it just seemed so real I had to ask.
ReplyDeleteyes, it's real
DeleteMotives
ReplyDeleteA young man who tired of cooking
Hoped he'd find someone kind and good looking
To take over his chores
And be one who adores
Without needing money or booking.
He offered this person to marry
And hoped that she would not be chary
But alas he discovered
When his needs he uncovered
That no one who answered would tarry.
Had to look up chary. I like the double limerick!
Deleteaaahhh i like a limerick tash. all the ones around here are dirty ones ha ha - love and proper limaricks - paul.
Deletecute! fun take on the topic
DeleteThanks for the nice comments, very kind you are. I had fun writing it, too.
DeleteFunny and clever. And I did know what chary meant.
DeleteMotives uncovered to his dismay caused the young man to lose his way. Happy New Year all!!!
ReplyDeletephew! got new year out of the way, so the library is open again finally. got a couple for you on motives.
ReplyDeleteMOTIVATION
" plastic crap and things going wrong. the future is made in hong kong " - flux of pink indians.
my motive is love
it's all i ever wanted
my motive for moving was my little dove
if i can't buy her enough make up and lagers
she does one of her public emotional saga's
my motives were true, but i got jaunted
the deed is done...is that not enough?
you were in need
you gotta soft to be tough
her motive is to feed her love lead
i either love or hate. from fate and destiny, i do digress
....................but such a pretty dress.
everyone has their own motives and oft times those motives are not pure
DeleteAh , the old story in a new form, always the old story.
Deleteoh, there was nothing pure about her bonita. like that old nursery rhyme " when she was good, she was very, very good. but when she was bad, she was wicked " - paul.
Deletethink i'm getting too old for the old story tash. might become a hermit and live in a cave....wait. i do that now ha ha - love and peace - paul.
DeleteI could get into a long discussion of codependency, the difference between love and cathexis, (what you describe is the latter), but maybe I'll save that for email. As a poem, it's really good and as always, I think it could be even better with a bit of editing but I understand your spontaneity also. Sorry it's taken me so long to respond to your email. I WILL get to it. LOL.
Deletethanks victoria. hadn't felt this way in a long time. like i always say, you would have to have met this woman to understand. despite the zillions of poems i've written about her. how do describe a crazy goddess? - love and peace paul.p.s. e-mail anytime karate kid ha ha.
DeleteHow indeed! I looked up cathexis and was quite in agreement with you, Victoria. Good description. I've met a few crazy goddesses in my time, however, I am not a big fan. I always say, "Handsome is as handsome dos," And "beauty is in the eye of the beholder." Perhaps she's a witch? They are good at enchanting people.
Deletedon't know if she's a witch tash, but she certainly enchanted me. probably that love potion she kept in her back pocket ha ha.it wasn't easy going out with a woman the whole city wanted to sleep with - love and peace - paul.
Deletethis is about my perfect woman that i met briefly. my motivation for going on, if you will, it was only a 45 min conversation, for as the title suggests we were only
ReplyDeleteSTRANGERS ON THE TRAIN ( part 3)
lauren doesn't want to work in the insurance office
she wants to be a mrs, not a miss
what she really wants to do is paint
she's clumsy and plain
and gets caught in the rain
no make up. terrible hair and clothes
but she knows which way the river flows
no way could she twirl
just my type of girl
bottle thick glasses
and attends catholic masses
but with those eyes, i don't think she has to forgive any trespassers
spotty, chubby and shy
that's what caught my eye
wants to paint the universe
in verse.
happy new year everybody. have a better one - love - paul.
she sounds wonderful with motives as sweet as she seems
DeleteThe ones that get away are always the best ones. I especially liked the last verse of this one. Said it all nicely in a good, brisk way.
Deletelike i said bonita, my type of girl, with a bag of books and music. too young for me though. made a nice change from meeting women with a bag full of booze, needles and heroin though - love - paul.
DeleteI love this one. It's obvious this woman is who she is. That's always been my attitude in life also. I think you could lose the 2nd line though. LOL
Deleteoh, i was gonna put ms, but it didn't go with office. getting my motivation back after a period of hibernation. expressing who i am, tends to get me in to trouble around here.....but who cares. to quote popeye the sailor man " i am what i am " ha ha - love and peace - paul.
Deleteindeed tash. the best ones get away. it's the ones that want to get caught that drive me nuts - love and peace - paul.
ReplyDeleteHi everybody, I just caught up with the prompt that was two for one, cities and war and love. I posted a poem and left comments on all of the poems. Happy New Year
ReplyDeleteI noticed Breanne hasn't posted anything in a while either. We need to get on her!!
Deleteyeah. where is breanne? she writes good stuff.
DeleteThe temperature went below 0 so they moved out of the camper for a couple of weeks to stay warm so I haven't been able to push her but I will blow up her phone on this one this week. At least try. LOL
ReplyDeleteMotives
ReplyDeleteDo you know what you intend to do about that
or will you try a quick fix like rabbit from a hat
I can't understand why people act like they do
What are their motives do they care for me or you?
Are the actions we perceive really as they appear
or are we seeing them twisted within our social sphere
what we may intend could come out all wrong
might even be compared to a protest song
I'm just trying to point out that it's not cut and dried
when you mean to help out but hurt someone's pride
as to the interpretation of my analogy of intention
I think I'll leave that to Frank Zappa and the "Mpther's of Invention"
For those of you not familiar with Frank, I do not mean a slight
My motives are purely whimsical and not put forth to fight
There's an old saying, "if life gives you lemons, make lemonade"
Try to think the best possible things to show with what you're made.
You must have worked hard on that one. Lots of good rhymes. Interesting piece of writing. (Was this the one you were looking for a rhyme for else for?)I like he questions in the second verse. Something to think about.
Deletenice one mr zappa. i always try to pull a rabbit from my hat and end up with a lemon - love and peace - paul.
Deletegood job! love that the rhymes don't feel forced so the flow of the lines isn't disrupted.
DeleteAnd Tasha it was paul fowler looking for a word to rhyme with else not paul bole...
He's coming around again
ReplyDeletethat look in his eye
I've seen that look before
that lovelorn google eyed
I can't live without you gaze
Can I resist him this time
in the end I don't
I give him what he wants
eight weeks later I realize
once again his motives were
lust not love as he proclaimed
yet when I look at the four
little kittens who snuggle
against me to nurse
I can't judge him
contented purrs from me
and the babies fill the air.
oh, those pussy cats can be naughty creatures bonita.....not as naughty as somebody i know though ha ha. she's got more kittens than that - love and peace paul.
DeleteLOL. I love it!!!
DeleteI really love your take off on the prompt. We see it from a cat's eye view. Very clever. Purrrrrrrrrr
ReplyDeleteNot a very good poem but one of my new years resolutions was to write a new poem every week, and here is is Jan 6 and it was do or die time.
ReplyDeleteWhat is poetry?
What combination makes
words a poem?
Is it only
because you say so?
Is it when you write to
find a voice
spontaneous
in the formless void,
but without discipline.
Or is it
adherence to
carefully crafted
form, pure in language, but
no passion?
Can it be both
or is it neither?
It's what motivates you
to write that
makes poetry.