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Sunday, June 11, 2017
Hello darkness my old friend
Simon and Garfunkel gave us a beautiful verse about darkness. Tell us what darkness means to you. Show us with your words if it is your friend, your enemy or a place where you disappear into until the light returns.
twilight comes gently darkness emerges upon my soul I am bolder in the dark I roam the streets and forests naked in my mind open to dreams and streams of laughter and thrills
in the dark streets I find strangers who play music that free my wretched harnessed mind my kind float along and carry peace signs the mystic magic of the night
the spell it further cast into the forest where trees, giant witches dance and play in the moonlight that becomes covered by clouds leaving the illusion the soft invocation
Drapes of soft velvet wrap Around me - quiet now Restored allows my mind to rest Keenness of thought returns as Noise recedes into oblivion Enveloped in calmness my fears Subdued lose their power Silence at last
Awesome acrostic. It flows so smoothly I would not have noticed it was an acrostic if Linda hadn't mentioned it although I did wonder why you'd capitalized the lines LOL.
Oh Wow!!! It's an acrostics poem!!! I love the soft imagery as well as the darkness restoring your mind!!! You do so well on acrostic poems. I can't do them.
I walk blindfolded into darkness feel my way through the inky maze called life wanting to fumble my way forward, always touching the right wall. But also to never find my way out.
Get to know the darkness as well as the light a teacher said that to me once, I know that he was right. Within me is there is darkness I need to make sure I keep an eye upon it and sense its allure. I know that this darkness can nurture seeds of light, and as I pay attention it helps them grow right. When I keep an eye on it I can see it plain for those who act in certain ways will give me a pain. It shows up in these others so I can recognize the part of that I ignore that's plain to others eyes. My darkness is my shadow it goes everywhere with me And when I keep an eye on it I keep an eye on me.
Reminds me a bit of "Me and my shadow" but I love that darkness goes with you everywhere. And yes, darkness can nurture seeds of light. Enjoyed this a lot, although I think when you rhyme you need to keep the meter should be more exact. But like you said, "this will do for now." It seems to be my philosophy whenever posting on this blog. LOL
Thanks, Victoria, I appreciate. Sorry I didn't comment on your poem, it is clever and what is it called? one of those special number of lines poems, I think. A bit sad to think of never finding your way out--where is your "clue?" No thread to guide you? Doesn't sound like you planned for this!
I like this, but I like parts of it especially. The second quatrain. "sure" and "allure" are a good rhyme, and the rhyme completes the thought. And I like the last lines very much.
twilight comes gently
ReplyDeletedarkness emerges
upon my soul
I am bolder in the dark
I roam the streets and forests
naked in my mind
open to dreams and streams
of laughter and thrills
in the dark streets
I find strangers
who play music
that free my wretched
harnessed mind
my kind float along
and carry peace signs
the mystic magic of the night
the spell it further cast
into the forest
where trees, giant witches
dance and play in the moonlight
that becomes covered
by clouds
leaving the illusion
the soft invocation
of the night breeze...
oooo, nice one! Loved the images. mysial, magical and fun!
DeleteVery nice. The images take me right there, but then I pictured Erie streets at night when we were teens for some reason.
Deletelol same streets that I was picturing!!!
Deletethis is wonderful! beautiful and soft yet ominous in the way it feels as I read. intense imagery! love it!
ReplyDeleteDARKNESS
ReplyDeleteDrapes of soft velvet wrap
Around me - quiet now
Restored allows my mind to rest
Keenness of thought returns as
Noise recedes into oblivion
Enveloped in calmness my fears
Subdued lose their power
Silence at last
Vivid and telling, not to mention spelling out the subject...a masterful poem indeed!
DeleteAwesome acrostic. It flows so smoothly I would not have noticed it was an acrostic if Linda hadn't mentioned it although I did wonder why you'd capitalized the lines LOL.
DeleteOh Wow!!! It's an acrostics poem!!! I love the soft imagery as well as the darkness restoring your mind!!! You do so well on acrostic poems. I can't do them.
ReplyDeleteDarkness
ReplyDeletea nonet
I walk blindfolded into darkness
feel my way through the inky maze
called life wanting to fumble
my way forward, always
touching the right wall.
But also to
never find
my way
out.
wow! had to remind myself to breath! what amazing imagry! you had me at the first amazing line.
DeleteThat first line is sure a catcher!!!! great imagery...fantastic nonet! Such a scary ending.
DeleteReally like the ending. Like the beginning too, but it's a little heavy handed. Well, so is the ending, but that's supposed to be.
DeleteMe and My Shadow
ReplyDeleteGet to know the darkness
as well as the light
a teacher said that to me once,
I know that he was right.
Within me is there is darkness
I need to make sure
I keep an eye upon it
and sense its allure.
I know that this darkness
can nurture seeds of light,
and as I pay attention
it helps them grow right.
When I keep an eye on it
I can see it plain
for those who act in certain ways
will give me a pain.
It shows up in these others
so I can recognize
the part of that I ignore
that's plain to others eyes.
My darkness is my shadow
it goes everywhere with me
And when I keep an eye on it
I keep an eye on me.
A bit preachy perhaps, yet true. This was inspired by something I just read. Perhaps more will emerge however this will do for now.
ReplyDeleteReminds me a bit of "Me and my shadow" but I love that darkness goes with you everywhere. And yes, darkness can nurture seeds of light. Enjoyed this a lot, although I think when you rhyme you need to keep the meter should be more exact. But like you said, "this will do for now." It seems to be my philosophy whenever posting on this blog. LOL
DeleteAnd BTW, you did not comment on my poem here either. Only my sisters did. )-:
Deletecute and a clever write
DeleteThanks, Victoria, I appreciate. Sorry I didn't comment on your poem, it is clever and what is it called? one of those special number of lines poems, I think. A bit sad to think of never finding your way out--where is your "clue?" No thread to guide you? Doesn't sound like you planned for this!
DeleteI really like this poem, Tasha. I don't think it was preachy at all. It read well aloud also.
DeleteI like this, but I like parts of it especially. The second quatrain. "sure" and "allure" are a good rhyme, and the rhyme completes the thought. And I like the last lines very much.
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading this and for your kind comment. I appreciate!
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