is she red, is she white is she blue and promised to the night she's red in the summer white in the winter when she's blue, she's a hummer when she's drunk, she goes grrrrrrrr
when she's alone, she cuts more red, to churn my guts doesn't really understand anything her life was always black and white just the money, sex and the bling told me 90% of her life was blue and shit
" i'll meet you at the cemetery gates. keats and yates are on your side. but you lose. for the love of wilde is on mine " - cemetery gates - the smiths.
I do like that second line a lot! is she blue and promised to the night.. strong line. quite a sad write and good use of the colors to bring out the emotions.
thanks bonita. i figured people could really play around with this promt . got another one...eeerr got another three actually, but two had to be burned.....they deserved it. they burned sort of red white and blue 'cos of the coloured pencils i use...weird - love - paul.
thanks vic. i sometimes have a tendency to do that. start off quite optomistic then, then get all emotional in the second, or third verse. gonna have to watch that - love and peace - paul.
thanks tash. trouble was she was far too familiar with other guys. got me in to five fights and arrested three times. but every day was an adventure - take care now. love - paul.
Red, white and blueberry pancakes celebrate the Fourth of July later on hot dogs and burgers and homemade apple pie. We salute our flag of freedom sweet land of liberty this is my America my land of opportunity. Some may hold you in contempt for standing strong and free but you are the only place the only land for me. We have our troubles but they are few compared to other countries who's cowardice we have bared. So I hold these truths self evident you are the greatest land of all Red white and blue shall reign and Americans stand brave and tall.
" i can't save them all, but i can damn well try " - captain america. very patriotic poem bonita. i still insist you americans celebrate my birth day a day early. i was born on the 5th of july ha ha. " we have nothing to fear, except fear itself " -F.D.R.
"Many forms of Government have been tried, and will be tried in this world of sin and woe. No one pretends that democracy is perfect or all-wise. Indeed it has been said that democracy is the worst form of Government except for all those other forms that have been tried from time to time.…" - Winston Churchill.
the red white and blue flew in to battle men slaughtered like cattle to protect the interests of international banks so they could finance big business to build more tanks what a stupid bloody mess
society? a thing of the past somehow i knew it wouldn't last miss helen " gaffa " gaffney opened my eyes a bloody white cocaine head, of twenty five year old in blue she said " i'll do anything, as long as it's not lies " not my flag but.....maybe if she could be true you ever feel you are in that stephen king story about a time lag
" no one you can save, that can't be saved " all you need is love - the beatles.
in this country you can critisize the red white and blue and the government just don't critisize the beatles and the music they sent.
there is no connection vic. it's like three poems in one again. like the three colours.....and i couldn't help myself from putting the beatles in. wish i could have worked a yellow submarine in there somehow - love and peace - paul.
the battle never ends bonita. whether it is against nazi's, commies, air pollution, deforestation, climate change or the damn people next door - we all have our red white and blue battles to fight - love and blues - paul.
I don't think I'm going to get my poem finished for this week, but the prompt inspired me to attempt a poem I've been procrastinating. I'm updated some YA novels I wrote a couple decades ago, and in the one I'm working on the girl gets involve in slam poetry. A boy in her English class competes in slams and helps her. The boy's slam poem in the original was rather political and of course, dated. I started writing that poem using "Red, white and blue". I'll post it whenever I finish it, but I have a tournament this weekend so it won't be on time.
Love it all except one word and the last stanza. hero/ine is distracting. Women are generally called heroes these days, like women now refer to themselves as actors. And the last stanza. All the others are vivid images, and actually keep the poem from being sentimental, just powerful. But IMMHO, telling us that it's "sentimental, powerful" makes it sentimental and less powerful.
Thanks for the comments, I wasn't sure it worked as a poem, so thanks for the support. I had a hard time coming up with a conclusion, Victoria, so ht was how I tried to end it. Love any suggestion you might have.
amazing how many world flags are red, white and blue..... maybe an english influence in that. nice one tash. library ladies love raspberries - love and peace - paul.
RED WHITE AND BLUE GIRL
ReplyDeleteis she red, is she white
is she blue and promised to the night
she's red in the summer
white in the winter
when she's blue, she's a hummer
when she's drunk, she goes grrrrrrrr
when she's alone, she cuts
more red, to churn my guts
doesn't really understand anything
her life was always black and white
just the money, sex and the bling
told me 90% of her life was blue and shit
" i'll meet you at the cemetery gates. keats and yates are on your side. but you lose. for the love of wilde is on mine " - cemetery gates - the smiths.
I do like that second line a lot! is she blue and promised to the night.. strong line. quite a sad write and good use of the colors to bring out the emotions.
Deletethanks bonita. i figured people could really play around with this promt . got another one...eeerr got another three actually, but two had to be burned.....they deserved it. they burned sort of red white and blue 'cos of the coloured pencils i use...weird - love - paul.
DeleteI love the way the poem takes such a darker turn in the 2nd stanza.
DeleteAh yes, a familiar lady, using your prompt...done well, original!
Deletethanks vic. i sometimes have a tendency to do that. start off quite optomistic then, then get all emotional in the second, or third verse. gonna have to watch that - love and peace - paul.
Deletethanks tash. trouble was she was far too familiar with other guys. got me in to five fights and arrested three times. but every day was an adventure - take care now. love - paul.
DeleteRed, white and blueberry pancakes
ReplyDeletecelebrate the Fourth of July
later on hot dogs and burgers
and homemade apple pie.
We salute our flag of freedom
sweet land of liberty
this is my America
my land of opportunity.
Some may hold you in contempt
for standing strong and free
but you are the only place
the only land for me.
We have our troubles
but they are few compared
to other countries
who's cowardice we have bared.
So I hold these truths self evident
you are the greatest land of all
Red white and blue shall reign
and Americans stand brave and tall.
" i can't save them all, but i can damn well try " - captain america. very patriotic poem bonita. i still insist you americans celebrate my birth day a day early. i was born on the 5th of july ha ha. " we have nothing to fear, except fear itself " -F.D.R.
Delete"Many forms of Government have been tried, and will be tried in this world of sin and woe. No one pretends that democracy is perfect or all-wise. Indeed it has been said that democracy is the worst form of Government except for all those other forms that have been tried from time to time.…" - Winston Churchill.
Deletehey! when did Winston Churchill join our group?
DeleteGood one, Bonnie, very patriotic and staunch!
DeleteFLAGS OF FORTUNE
ReplyDeletethe red white and blue flew
in to battle
men slaughtered like cattle
to protect the interests of international banks
so they could finance big business
to build more tanks
what a stupid bloody mess
society? a thing of the past
somehow i knew it wouldn't last
miss helen " gaffa " gaffney opened my eyes
a bloody white cocaine head, of twenty five
year old in blue
she said " i'll do anything, as long as it's not lies "
not my flag
but.....maybe if she could be true
you ever feel you are in that stephen king story about a time lag
" no one you can save, that can't be saved " all you need is love - the beatles.
in this country you can critisize the red white and blue and the government
just don't critisize the beatles and the music they sent.
thanks guys and gals i love this site - pau
I'll take Bonnie's word for the connection between the stanzas because I see none.
DeleteWar is so built into us, alas, if only we'd wake up and realize what a waste it is. Good sense is not poplar.Interesting poem.
Deletethere is no connection vic. it's like three poems in one again. like the three colours.....and i couldn't help myself from putting the beatles in. wish i could have worked a yellow submarine in there somehow - love and peace - paul.
Deletegood sense never seems to be popular tash. stupidity abounds though - take care now - love - paul.
Deleteon first read it seems disconnected but really the battle is still going on whether in a war of soldiers or a war of people trying to get through life
ReplyDeletethe battle never ends bonita. whether it is against nazi's, commies, air pollution, deforestation, climate change or the damn people next door - we all have our red white and blue battles to fight - love and blues - paul.
ReplyDeleteI don't think I'm going to get my poem finished for this week, but the prompt inspired me to attempt a poem I've been procrastinating. I'm updated some YA novels I wrote a couple decades ago, and in the one I'm working on the girl gets involve in slam poetry. A boy in her English class competes in slams and helps her. The boy's slam poem in the original was rather political and of course, dated. I started writing that poem using "Red, white and blue". I'll post it whenever I finish it, but I have a tournament this weekend so it won't be on time.
ReplyDeleteRed White and Blue Perfection
ReplyDeleteRed are her cheeks, blue her eyes,
white as snow her hands:
perfect beauty for fairy tales.
Blue are the skies, red the leaves,
white are the clouds above:
perfect day for fall.
Red is for courage, blue for truth,
white for pure of heart:
perfect hero/ine.
Red is for straw or raspberries,
Blue for blueberries, white for cream
perfect for summer.
Red, white and blue is our flag,
flying high against the skies
perfect vision of the USA.
Red white and blue is delicious,
sentimental, powerful,
perfect for a poem.
love it! yes red white and blue stands for many things and as you said is delicious, sentimental, powerful... good job!
DeleteLove it all except one word and the last stanza. hero/ine is distracting. Women are generally called heroes these days, like women now refer to themselves as actors. And the last stanza. All the others are vivid images, and actually keep the poem from being sentimental, just powerful. But IMMHO, telling us that it's "sentimental, powerful" makes it sentimental and less powerful.
DeleteThanks for the comments, I wasn't sure it worked as a poem, so thanks for the support. I had a hard time coming up with a conclusion, Victoria, so ht was how I tried to end it. Love any suggestion you might have.
Deleteamazing how many world flags are red, white and blue..... maybe an english influence in that. nice one tash. library ladies love raspberries - love and peace - paul.
DeleteRaspberries are a big favorite of mine too! Thanks for the comment, peace and love back, Tash
Delete