Saturday, September 16, 2017
SUPER TIRED!
Victoria and I were messaging one night and I told her I had to go because I was super tired! She started calling me SUPER TIRED as a super hero name. What is your super hero name or super power? Not one already used like spiderman, or superwoman but one you made up for your own special super power or super hero name.
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Please note, I managed to post a poem just under the wire at 11:20 Saturday and hope some of you will be good enough to read it. Thanks! This prompt is so much more fun! (No criticism intended, just had a real struggle with my words)
ReplyDeleteMe too. I got mine in on Fri but only Bonnie and Tad commented. I'd appreciate yours as well as the Pauls. Linda is excused since she's in the hospital.
DeleteSuper Tired
ReplyDeleteShe gets up early, rolls out of bed
There’s work to do, cats to be fed
Cleans litter boxes and floors she does sweep
Washes the dishes while her husband’s asleep.
Pushes her walker from room to room
Somehow manages to handle the broom
On Tuesday does laundry, Thursday she shops
Does all the cooking the veggies she chops.
Pays the bills and without fail
Every day brings in the mail.
On the go she’s totally wired
She’s six cats hero - she’s SUPER TIRED!
Goes to the Y to get herself strong
Somehow she manages to get along
Fights a disease that leaves her weak
But of this you rarely hear her speak.
Runs all the errands in spite of her ills
Every day takes a handful of pills
She laughs, she smiles, enjoys her life
As 6 cat mother and one man’s wife.
Goes on with her life with vim and zeal
You never know how she really feels.
If this poem seems a bit uninspired
It’s simply because she’s SUPER TIRED!
I don't really have a problem with the reversed syntax -- it works pretty well in a comic poem. But if you wanted to, you could make it "Litter to clean and floors to sweep."
DeleteI generally believe you should either have no punctuation at all, or punctuate correctly. In this one, you need the punctuation, so I'd go over that more carefully. I'd write out six, and I'd make the possessive -- six cats' mother.
"Somehow manages" doesn't scan. You need "da-DA" in the second metric foot. Maybe "somehow finds skill." That's not great, but it does scan.
How about putting "the veggie she chops" in parentheses?
Love how you took my joke and turned it into an excellent poem. Like Tad, I love the ending!! And of course his suggestions would make it even better.
DeleteI like this a lot. It made me chuckle. I read it aloud and it really takes the cake!!!!
DeleteBonnie, I absolutely loved this poem! it read very well out loud. It was funny and serious and had a lot of great quqlities
Deletei read and reread and checked and double checked and still a typo got through...sigh.. it should be 6 cats not 6 cat...grrr
ReplyDeleteI like this a lot and I love the ending.
ReplyDeleteI tried to write something new, and I really hated it. So I came back to this very old poem that has super abilities of sorts.
ReplyDeleteTHE MASKED MAN IN LOVE
I come from
the corners of the earth trailing glory
the wind roars
rams dance
and ships cut through giant waves
at my command
I make dogs bark
and when I pass through your town
you'll know it
because when the wind blows east to west
I make the grass bend west to east
these things I'll do for anyone
But I'd give you
old things
like certain parts of my body
unseen and untouched by mortal woman
in over a thousand years
like trails through woods
that lead to homes unbuilt
and things that grow slowly
as babies
and things that fit in your pocket
so you can carry them anywhere
and large ungainly things
you'd have to come home to
I love the mystery of this one. like not quite being able to see around the corner to know what is there.
Deletehey super tired girl and the masked man. nice poems. keep going to the y and i make dogs bark too. my secret power is eeerrr secret. as a life long reader of super hero books, this was a dream project for me. here is my poem.
Deleteman of glass
i wanns be cool hand hulk, but i'm not big enough
i wanna be a thunder god, but i'm not that tough
i wanna be a bat, or a cap, but i don't play that rough
once dated the invisible woman
she kept disapearing
even when i offered her an invisible ring
claws like wolverine
a super villianess like i've never seen
oh! the evil she could summon
i'd like to fly, but i'm afraid of heights
i'd like to be daredevil, but i'm scared of fights
guess i'll just have to be human and fight the good fight
while avoiding the kryponite.
" we can be heroes if just for one day " - david bowie.
- love and peace to everyone - paul.
Paul this is a super poem! but please try to remember to start a new comment section so your poem and comments for your poem will be separated from the others. I love how you played with all the super heroes in this one. fun read.
DeleteEverything Bonnie said and more. Absolutely wow! I think this is the best thing I've seen of yours so far. Growing up a comic book fan myself I can relate too.
DeleteAnd Tad, I have always loves your Masked Man poems and I think they were old when I first read them in the early 90s(?? Late 80s??.)
DeletePaul you made it difficult to comment on your poem but I hope you will find this amidst the comments. I loved your comic book poem. I came into comics in the beginning. It was the beginning of Superman when I was a kid and the beginning of Daredevil and other super heroes when I was in my late teen. I was also in on the beginning of Wonderwoman. Kids didn't collect them they traded comics back then.
DeleteTad I like your masked man poems. I think this one really fits the bill for a super hero.
DeleteTad, you masked man poems are terrific. this is about the fifth one you have posted. they read well and mysterious aloud.
Deletethank you so much ladies. a woman who likes super hero comics? where were you thirty years ago girl ha ha. i kept getting told " comics are just for kids " my favourite form of literature. sometimes a book author will waste ten pages, describing a room and the people in it, but a good comic book artist like george perez, or jack kirby could do it in one panel, then get on with the story - love and peace - paul.
ReplyDeleteI collected comics in the mid-60s. If I had my comic collection now I could make a mint. I was Marvel exclusive. It was during those Marvel vs. DC wars and I was Marvel and Stan Lee all the way. I had Daredevil 1 - 70ish, Spiderman 18 - 100ish, and soooo many others. When I hit teenager and started dating, I gave them all to my best friend's little brother. They left them laying around the house and their mom threw them in the trash. Sigh..
Deletegeeeezzz you sound exactly like me. i loved sixties and seventies comics. stan lee and roy thomas were my writing hero's. i had fantastic four no 50 and bizarre stuff like man thing, ghost rider and my all time favourite warlock, by jim starlin.everything is in storage now. i still read the modern books, but they aren't the same ans are more like the movies.believe i still have scattered around the country, every single issue of the avengers. as i told your sister bonita, i try to live my life by something that captain america said " i can't save them all...but i can damn well try " - love and peace - paul.
DeleteMy brother and I, total country hicks, found our way to the Lower East Side and Lafayette Street, the address on the Mad Comics masthead, and bought every issue we didn't have. Complete set, from issue one. On the day that he left for college, my mother....well, the rest is too sad to tell.
DeletePaul, I also had a comic book collection as a kid. I enjoyed them all. I still enjoy a good comic when I get my hands on it. I enjoyed your poem very much
DeleteJoe Sinnott lives in my home town.
ReplyDeleteYeah, but he was mostly an inker. Have you seen the movie "Chasing Amy"?
DeleteThis didn't go exactly where I wanted it to go, but it kinda got somewhere anyway.
ReplyDeleteI am Wonder Woman!
I wonder how far is the nearest star.
Does it have planets and are they cold?
And I wonder where my glasses are,
and wonder just how I got this old.
Do people inhabit that planet round
are they reptiles, birds or mammals like us?
If ever my glasses can be found,
I'll post a blog and we can discuss.
I could go live with those people and choose
to try life again. If I could just see.
I could get contacts that I wouldn't lose,
I wonder what kind of person I'd be.
Do those people age, have babies, and die?
I should write down this story, again and again.
But I can't find my glasses and I can't deny
I will die someday I just wonder when.
powerful write! humor entwined with harsh realities.I like this one a lot.
DeleteVery interesting and fulfilling poem. I really enjoyed it very much.
DeleteI like this poem a lot. I like listening to it. It read very well.
Deleteknew a wonder woman once.personally i think alien life forms would be mostly crocodiles bacteria and sharks. there is a theory that jellyfish and octopus actually rule the world 'cos they inhabit about 70% of it - love and peace - paul.
DeleteFunny and sad. And worth another draft.
ReplyDeleteNice poetry all. When I have a minute and I'm a little fresher I'll try to comment individually. I'm still puzzling over how to write a poem about the super power I uncovered. (Sigh.) Working on it. Enjoyed all the efforts, Paul's was super! Bonnie, you did your usual fine work. Victoria, what can I say/ You're always so good. and of course, Tad...well if you let go a bit maybe you'd not mind posting something not already written. Why not? Nothing perfect is needed, effort counts! Warmest to all, Tasha
ReplyDeleteSuper Smile
ReplyDeleteI tried and tried without results
I thought and thought and came up blank
because I had my superpower, however,
I couldn’t seem to write a poem about it,
And I was frustrated, irritated could not extract
The pearl from the oyster I was trying to shuck
So here’s the skinny, best I can say:
My superpower is a smile that makes other people happy instantly!
of course if they don’t want to be happy…
that’s just their bad luck.
A smile is a great super power. I try it on every one and not many people can resist!!!
Deleteone day a friend of mine and I were walking around the mall and I asked her why is everyone smiling at me? she laughed and said because you're smiling all the time and it's catchy. sometimes we don't even realize we are spreading smiles.
DeleteTasha, asmile goes a long way. if you smile at someone they smile at the next person they see and on and on all day long. that's super
DeleteThanks one and all for kind comments. It was fun once I managed to do it.
Deleteheeeyyy super smile girl. nice one.
Delete" the secret of flying is to throw yourself at the ground and miss " - hitchhikers guide to the galaxy- douglas adams. - love paul.
Whew! Finally! I have spent too much time working on how to do this and finally just gave up and here you go! Best I could do this time.
ReplyDeleteelectrodes here, electrodes there
ReplyDeleteI was dubbed Wire Woman
the day I sprouted wires from my chest
and wires from my arms
my chair could zoom from place to place
so fast I was a blur
If I pulled the red wire
I'd have the powers of invisibility
the green wire, I could fly
the blue wire, unbelievable strength
but, woe, these powers were only temporary
to be used only while I was healing
and in transition
Wire Woman is gone now
never to return
she's but a memory to me
a wistful caring thought
LOL. It really is a family trait to laugh at ourselves for things like being wired up. Love this!
DeleteYep, you really did look like a wire woman in the hospital. I always wondered where all those wires went!!!
Deletelol! yep you are hooked up to many wires after surgery and wonder if they do truly give you some powers. do you remember when Kenz was 5 (?) and had her appendix out? the nurse told her not to be afraid because when she woke up she would have an IV in her arm. when she woke up she cried because she didn't hae her IVY in her arm. bet you miss that chair :-)
ReplyDeleteBonnie, Please check your book on Amazon, I posted a review. Hope you like it.
DeleteYup, I still tell that story too, Bonnie!
DeleteThank you Tasha! that was awesome!
DeleteGlad you liked it. Thanks for checking it out. Hope others will do the same.
Deletemy super power when i was all wired up in hospital was losing my memory completely. couldn't remember my own name, or what you were supposed to do with food. it's mostly back now, though the 90's are still a blur. as they used to say in " mission impossible ", " don't cut the red wire! " ha ha.
DeleteLovely poem, Linda. Glad you ar ok and out of the wires and hospital too, I hope! Haling prayers coming your way.
ReplyDeleteHow Super Am I
ReplyDeleteMan I'm Super, super duper, so all that
I'm known for my slight of wit and old top hat
Am I facilitator man or procrastinator Paul?
Sometimes I'm giant man really big and tall
Being diversified is another super power
I'm able to change my mind in the blink of an hour
I leap over concepts with the greatest of ease
my interests to do as I please
Am I don yet? No I am not even close
as I don my costume complete with panty hose
Fear not, for I shall save you from whatever looms
and if you don't want saved I'll make up some dooms
I must say I'm so super that I can't really decide
should I save the world or just my measly hide
so to sum up my powers it's hard to say for sure
which power to exploit for my legacy to endure.
lmbo! this is super! had me laughing from line one! love it!
DeleteThis is hilarious!!!!!!!!! Loved it!Wonderful images.
Deletenice one mate. getting a bit old for leaping over tall buildings nowadays ha ha - paul.
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